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Post by grasshop on Aug 10, 2006 15:12:32 GMT -5
Here's what I have completed of my fic-in-progress, Cruelty. It is centered around my favourite pairing of Aqune/Grasshop. This one has blood/gore, cruelty in all sorts of manner, sex, and all that other good stuff. It's not done though, and may change a bit as I flesh it out, but this is the rough skeleton of a beginning! It'll probably be a shorter fic, though...Silver Lit being my longer fic XD Here's the link, as I won't post the fic here b/c of it's content. lol But here's the link XD Please R & R here: CrueltyI hope ya liked what I had so far! I'll post and tell you when I update the fic XD And if you don't like stuff like this...well...don't say I didn't warn you. This part is VERY tame compared to what's about to come...I build things up in my fic XD lol Oh, and for yaoi lovers, I may throw a yaoi bit or two in here hehe XD |
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Post by grasshop on Aug 17, 2006 0:43:59 GMT -5
I might as well just quit this fic huh?....
Nobody seems to like it....though it was becoming one of my favs....*cries*
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Post by animeotaku on Aug 17, 2006 10:02:43 GMT -5
NOOOOOOO! keep it going plz!
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Post by grasshop on Aug 17, 2006 11:07:44 GMT -5
Why? I have no comments on the story...no specifics,a nd I thrive on comments to keep me going...like viwers have to particularly pick out something and discuss it...or at least give me ideas and whatnot -___-'
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Post by animeotaku on Aug 17, 2006 15:38:20 GMT -5
ok,well, i like the detail you put into it, i like the depressing/gory setting, theres nothing i can see wrong with it. and grasshop-chan, as long as you keep writing, i shall always read them, thats a promise! and if you ever need ideas, im always here to help!
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Post by grasshop on Aug 18, 2006 0:22:06 GMT -5
Well....I need ideas for the fic XD....I'm stuck on this one...
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Post by animeotaku on Aug 18, 2006 10:50:52 GMT -5
ok, well maybe some1 discovers them there, or something
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Post by grasshop on Aug 18, 2006 10:53:11 GMT -5
Hmmm...sonds good. Like someone randomly coming by to help them out. I should make it someone really unexpected....yes....
Thanx for the idea. I'll write it in laterz XD
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Post by animeotaku on Aug 18, 2006 10:56:56 GMT -5
kk, glad i could help
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Post by grasshop on Aug 25, 2006 12:09:19 GMT -5
Bah....just gonna post the rest of what I wrote here, not much b/c the stupid virus keep making it difficult to write -___-' It won't let me open the other page where I originaly have it posted so yah....
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“NOOOOOOO!” Aqune cried, eyes widening in horror at the grisly scene. Tears of pure anger streaked the pale cheeks, making her look almost as if she were dead. ‘I am dead. I am….’ The thoughts wafted in and out of her wearied mind. Her knees felt as if they were shattered…her chest ached with each heartbeat. She nearly wished it to stop….wished her eyes blind so that she’d have to see no more….feel no more…
The tormented Invectid’s strangled exclamations formed into pleas for help. “A…aqune….AQUNE….please….please don’t! DON’T!” He gagged, took in a shaky breath and continued, “Aqune…HELP ME!….please! My….Aqu…ne!” The shouts came in little bursts, for he had to take huge gulping breaths between the sharp stabs of pain that caused the wind to be knocked from him. His begging for her help made Aqune’s world darken even more.
“What….can I do….?” She whispered, the ground she had looked towards blurred from the watery haze over her eyes. Listening to him…his voice…She loved his voice. But never did she want to hear it like this. Never ever… “What am I to do?” Her head jerked up to look his way again, her mouth tightening more, her chest pounding more with fury and desperation. One of the Turandots had broken Grasshop’s arm as the bug struggled for his life, and the limb now bent awkwardly…Aqune groaned in disgust. ‘Oracle, please let me die….take the life from me and give it back to him…or let me die, just let me die, please.’
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She had first come to him on one stormy evening, after a loss with the Spider Riders. He was, too, in distress…from the constant chidings of his peers. They exchanged many stories, tears came, they both wept bitterly…no one had ever been there to weep with her like he had. No one was able to feel the constant pain of life. Buguese’s head was too full of dutiful thoughts, and Beerain wasn’t one to focus on such shortcomings of the world…But here he was. The one…
They had gone into the night as separate beings, virgins both cast down and out by every aspect of life and supposed humanity. But after that…after the storm had passed they emerged as one, stronger, more confident.
It was theirs and theirs alone, for they agreed upon it. Something inside of the dark-haired girl had led her to this fateful moment, to forge that one memory…
The first time had been riddled with discomfort and pain…she had never imagined that it would come with that price. He was, too, a bit shy at first, but she looked at him and knew that he was being led by the same force to go through with it. They went into the act slowly…Aqune being the first to shed her clothing and to be exposed. It represented the shame…but now she had nothing to cover up, for there was another like her, for her, and that alone was enough. Her arms had wanted to go protectively to certain places. She had looked to Grasshop for comfort, but he had made it all more awkward with his staring…this was new for him as well.
When Grasshop uncovered himself it was easier, for now she could look her fill and understand how much he was going through. She noted the deep blush that had stung his face, how his eyes were ashamedly cast downward. It was the same….they were the same…Soon they could bring their eyes to meet each others, and were able to behold each others nakedness without shaking too much.
Aqune was really the first to let her eyes venture to secret areas that marked Grasshop’s body. She had sat on the bed, trying to make the situation more natural…he was a tall, lanky thing….but his body was nevertheless well-toned. She caught him as he was standing near the corner of her room, his delicate looking hands placed gently over his genitals. She could still see, however…how the length of it measured, how it seemed to want to creep out from behind the frail fingers, how it expanded with a mind of its own. Aqune realized that she had been holding her breath and let it escape with a sigh of wonderment.
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Srry I didn't get to write much. I'll have more later I promise XD
Please let me know what you guys think!!! XXXXDDDD
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